By Noel Ihebuzor
Haiku on Vital
From “life” in one tongue
though often lost sight of when
we clutch wild at winds
blinkered by trifles,
we chase blank shadows and let
essentials slip by
The true essentials
touch deep, eternal truths shine
bright, stars on dark night
Vital, life giving
energy laden, bubbling
healthy and vibrant
clear eyes and clean hearts
find you in the complex and
hug your cool calm warmth
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still grappling with this art form! can’t wait to hear what my Haiku coach will say about this – I suspect though that I may have exceeded the number of stanzas allowed for one haiku!
clear eyes clean heart…wow! this is so smooooth and strong. Glad I read it… going to read it again 🙂
Thanks, Unfetteredbs, You are so kind!
Noel, this haiku chain is beautiful, beautiful! Now, if you want to post it on Haiku Heights, #2 needs some tweaking (maybe change obsessed to fixed so it fits the pattern–though I love it as is). These are all so wonderful–interlinked but each stands well on its own. You do so well with this form, breathing life and energy into this tight form, almost magically.
Here is the link to Haiku Heights–please, please, pretty please post this gorgeous haiku chain there! http://haiku-heights.blogspot.com/
Thanks, Susan. I have tried to tweak!
Visiting your inspiring haiku from Haiku Heights. Well done!
Thanks, Bruce! Your comments encourage.
Thanks!Your comments encourage me!
Nah–the success is yours–well done, my friend!
Noel–try “blinkered by fine points” or “blinkered by trifles”, or perhaps “screened by trivia”
Curse the 5-syllable requirement–I love what you have already!
Nice, nice, nice!
the success is my tutor’s! so, all yours, Susan!
For me, this set needed a couple of readings to truly appreciate the beauty and meaning of your flowing words…..wonderful
Joanne, You are very kind!
Imela, Merci, Asante sana X 3
Truly amazing Noel! You captured the life of haiku which I gather is not limited to any number of stanzas
Hank
Thanks, Hank. I am happy you liked it! It is a challenging art form and I am still struggling with it!
inspiring! and very very intriguing loved my stay here and I am sure I am gonna come for more!
Thanks, Makahrukh! Glad you liked the Haiku!
“we chase blank shadows and let
essentials slip by”,.these lines are my favourite here. Gem
Thanks, Jaideep! They are mine too, incidentally!
Love the deep thoughts here….vitally important to read and understand..
Thanks, I really appreciate your comments.